Audience feedback on second draft of A Soul's Redemption

Here are some people's opinions on our second draft and how we could improve it for our final film. If you click on the photo it will send you to the video.

A Soul's Redemption title slide

This is what Annabel has created for the title slide on serif draw plus Photoshop. This is the same programme she used to create the logo. She used the shape tool and "Broadway" font which we all think looks effective. The reason I think that this is effective is because it draws the viewer into the film because it is bold. But also the colours used reflect the theme of our thriller because grey is known to be a colour which symbolises mystery and loneliness. 

Second Draft for A Soul's Redemption

Here I have edited all the clips that we will be using together with the music in the background on Movie Maker. But I only did this so when we edit it together, it will not only be quicker but make it so we can refer back to it if something happens. Also the logo will fit the screen more and the title "A Soul's Redemption" will appear at the end. Another thing  that we will do when we edit it together as a group is we will add the name of the actor and everyone involved onto the screen while the shots are happening at different times so they all get credited. For example, on one of Bertie's close up show his name in the bottom left-hand side corner.Furthermore, the transition from one shot to another will be better.

Filming schedule

Character profile

Roland Barthes - Narrative codes

Target Audience

From Visually.



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Final Logo for Production name

Option 1

Option 2

Final Decision

Annabel created the logos in photoshop and then showed us them in lesson. We had a discussion as a group and decided to use option 2 but add the "Conabel Productions" from option 1 to the bottom of the final chosen logo. This was so it made a clear indication to who made the thriller and what we were called. .

Storyboard for A Soul's Redemption

Annabel illustrated the first 6 shots but then I completed the rest writing about the shot, the sound within it, drawing it and colouring. If you want to see the storyboard in a larger scale so you can read it click on the link at the end.

Screenplay for A Soul's Redemption

Screenplay for A Soul's Redemption from Elsiew